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  1. Grace CarrSeptember 18, 2019 at 10:11 PM

    This is a great paper that flowed really well upon my first reading! I can tell you are a creative writing major. Your introduction as written provides a clear thesis and states the most important information about the profession/discipline; however, you might need to include more background information. Because I know the prompt of the assignment, I was able to understand the direction of the whole essay; however, you might want to include slightly more background information in your intro so that a random person would be able to tell where the essay is going. The professions/disciplines of creative writing might seem obvious, but maybe include a section where you go into detail about that aspect as well as a brief description of the methods you used to gather information.
    The sources are analyzed well, but it is not always completely clear which paragraphs are discussing which aspect of SLR/AATP. Maybe include a sentence in each paragraph that explicitly states which convention you are discussing. The way it's currently written, it seems as if your essay is organized more by sources instead of conventions of writing. You use quotations effectively in the non-academic section; however, you might want to include more in the academic section. As stated before, the ordering of the paragraphs makes sense but should be ordered by convention, not source.
    I wasn't able to find any information that came directly from an interview; also, I'm not sure if it meets the 1250 word/5 page requirement discussed in the assignment.
    Overall, this paper was really enjoyable to read! I especially liked the way you worded your sentences and the way they flowed together.

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